I am a creative writer/poet

[sailorreefer]

I have a lot of ideas for stories that go through my head every day but never write them down...too busy working for Corporate Values Suck. I do however have some poems I'd like to share...laugh if you want I care not. I have gotten some compliments but these are people who see me everyday and are afraid of my boney fist hitting them LOL. So just be honest.

Time goes by we all live;
Light shines down to show us the path;
When time goes by at the speed of light, where have our live's gone?

Words

The verses that are spoken are painful, they never fall upon deaf ears;
Each syllable tears into my skin, like a carving knife;
Every letter infects the wound that was left behind;
Moments like these I envy the hearing impaired;
Lies know no limit to pain.

That I just wrote, my poetry book is missing Hmmmmm I trust no one, for they suck ass and they can start with mine LOL

A heart's passion runs deep, like the sea;
It can be peaceful and solemn when in love;
Then can be torrent and spiteful like a hurricane when hurt;
Funny how no one has created a weather control machine, oh wait thats a therepist.

[alantar]

Stupid question: is that all one poem or like, 4 different ones? It's hard to tell given how they're presented.

[sailorreefer]

Sorry bout that, their three different poems the way I formated it was bad so I'm sorry for that.

[alantar]

Oh, ok so that's a connecting part in the 5th division (counting the one word title of one of them). It was almost regular meter, so I wasn't sure.

I like that first one. Not much to say on that. Second one feels kind of disjointed, but that may be intentional. Given the subject matter, it would fit. The last one just seems to jump around, if that makes sense. Like, it starts out roughly metered and then it suddenly isn't, and it doesn't feel like the theme fits the effect this creates.

Well, but then again, I was never any good at poetry so I could just be babbling.

[sailorreefer]

the first one I wrote at a friend's house, the second I was just sitting and thinking about how society makes white lies ok. Their just words so it shouldn't hurt. and the third well I was thinking about someone I really thought I loved but it hurt to even be with em. The line after that was a sarcastic remark to it.

[alantar]

Oooooh, so the last line isn't part of it? Ok, now it doesn't seem to jump in style anymore.

[sailorreefer]

Glad I could clear that up for ya lol, if only my mind wouldn't jump from idea to idea like it does maybe I wouldn't have to explain it over and over lol. Glad you liked em